Jo Stewart
ENGL1A
11/19/08
Undecided Voters of 2008 Election
On November 4, 2008 many Americans will have to face a very hard challenge. Every four years, Americans engage in the challenge of selecting a person whom we will eventually just grow to dislike in the next 4 to 8 years, depending on our tolerance and patients we carry together as a one Nation. People are most concerned about the economy and Iraq. Considering, while under the leadership of President Bush, on September 11, 2001, America was attacked on its own soil for the first time since Pearl Harbor. As this war on terror continues, we are scared for what will happen next with the fatal decision we are about to take that will soon influence our future. Of all the elections, this one was by far the most interesting to me. This year our candidates ranged from sex and age to race and ethnicity. For the first time since Martin Luther King, we have a African American man speaking aloud for our country. Therefore leaving many people undecided about whom to vote for the 2008 Presidential Elections. According to the nation, to be an American citizen, it is my responsibility to choose the best candidate for the 2008 election ballot.
The first candidate is from the republican party, John Sidney McCain, a 72-year old white male American. McCain served in the U.S. Naval Academy in 1958 until 1981 when he retired as captain in the Navy. Working in the U.S. House of Representatives since 1982 and being involved in the Senate Commerce Committee his whole life, sharing his believes on the way he things our country should be ran. For our country, McCain has promised many things, He wants to keep the tax cuts, helping the middle class, and he wants to double the personal exemption for dependents. He wants to take taxes and pay the big companies of America. He wants to build nuclear reactors and reduce Medicare. He also promises to eliminate paying for the projects that are helping our communities to be able to put money back into peoples` taxes.
The second candidate is 47-year old Barack Hussein Obama, an African American man whom graduated from Harvard Law School and worked as a community organizer and practiced as a civil rights attorney from 1997- 2004. As a member of the Democratic party, during this campaign Obama shows his strengths to be a president as he listens to everyones opinions and suggestions to consider before making his final decisions. Obama promises to make school for college students ore affordable, he also wants to redeploy the soldiers of Iraq and settle in peace. Obama wants to stop working on missel defense systems and put the money back into our pockets to be able to help us with everyday expenses. Obama wants to help teachers with expenses and stable jobs over their heads. He is the man that is trying to help out the people in everyday life rather than the society like his opposing candidate.
Although both of these candidates are good people to be trustworthy and appropriate for the intense job responsibilities as the President of the United States, only one man can take the title. This is where everyone comes to a hault, a sudden drop of the jaw, a sigh, thinking they’re both good candidates in their own separate ways, but how to come to a decision? Obama is the ideal American man to consider for President because he puts his self on our level and he tries to relate to problems that we are facing today in society. With the economic status and the war going on for so long, Obama is promising us to help take these rising problems into consideration and help out America. He is also trying to help students and the youth of America with debt and currency issues. While on the other hand McCain is trying to help the rich people with the big companies, to save money on taxes. He wants to end the war “the right way” and continue in battling Iraq until they give up or forfeit.
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1. What is the writer’s thesis? Summarize in one sentence.
With the diversity of candiates, not just in a physical sense but in their plans and ideals as well, in the 2008 election voters face a hard decision.
2. What evidence is cited to prove and support the writer’s thesis? What pieces of evidence are cited from the readings and/or the writer’s observations to support the thesis?
Some evidence supporting the thesis could be that Barack Obama is a young African American man. John McCain is an older and more experienced white man.( I might suggest mentioning the running mates)
3. Is the writer’s reasoning/critical thinking provided to explain how the evidence proves and supports the thesis?
Yes and no. The writer clearly explains some of the positive and negative traits of the candidates but there wasn't that much personal insight or disection of the issue.
4. Does the writer address counter-claims in the essay? Does the writer effectively refute the counter with evidence and reasoning?
Thw writer does state issues that should help make the decision of the undecided voter are bold (such as the economy) but doesn't use that direct wording
5. What else could the writer cite as evidence in this essay?
The writer could use some examples of real problems people had with picking the candidate other than just describing the candidates. Ex: racism, sexism, ect...
6. What counter-claims still need to be addressed?
There really aren't many counter claims to be made when discussing the undecided voter for this paper
Is there any other feedback you want to share?
I would def reccomend getting into more detail about specific reasons these people like or dislike a candidate although I do see the primary focus of your paper is the two candidates. Just dig into it a little more. :)
1.The plans and differences of Mccain and Obama, who were running for the election of the president of the united states 2008.
2.The evidences is cited from observation from the media and personal opinion. I can tell that you followed the election and the goals of both candidates.
3.You could add more of your personal opinion. Your statement explain the different goals and plans of the two candidates.
4.I can see in your conclusion that Obama support more the young generation and middle-class whereas McCain wants to support more the higher-class with cutting taxes. You could add your personal opinion or suggestions.
5.No suggestions
6.No suggestions
all in all, good essay! You could add more facts and personal opinion!
Good job!
You are very clear in your opening. You used good points with clear fact. I like that you give your opinion and showed that it was hard for others to do. Looking forward to your ending, nice that you use dates, places (facts) show us the way.
Thank you, I'm working on that getting it in order and giving more detail for my examples, thank you for your input it help me alot.
1. the thesis of this essay is about the presidential election and how the people have to make a decision on a candidate.
2.the evidence that is being supported is the issues of the terrorism that happened on our soil during bush's reign. and how it is important to choose wisely because you might grow to hate that president during the years that they are in office.
3.her reasoning is that there are many decisions that have to be made when choosing a presidential candidate and that with the incidents that occurred during the reign of bush swayed his original candidates to hate him.
4.she uses counter claims that support the arguments to persuade people to vote wisely.
5.I don't think that she needs to add anything else. this essay is very concrete.
6.I think that this essay is written very well and i wouldn't think that anything else would need to be added.
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